The sun forgot to get out of bed.
His alarm didn’t wake him,
And the moon didn’t call by on her way home.
So it was dark,
For a very long time,
But then the sun,
His bed was so comfortable,
And it did him no harm,
To rest for a while.
And so it was dark,
Said the moon,
I know we all forget things as we get older,
But the Earth is getting so much colder.
Said the people.
We like the moon,
We really do,
But without your warm glow,
We’re feeling kinda blue.
Said the sun.
All I can hear is your damned whining,
But my pillow’s plumped,
The sheets are soft,
And this star ain’t for shining.
But the moon,
Was now working over-time.
To be honest,
She was pretty annoyed,
That the sun didn’t come.
So the moon quit too.
And it was dark,
Wow. Thanks! That might be the best first comment I’ve had on a post!
ha ha! No way!
I’d like to read this to my daughter.
Oh god… do it… but I take no responsibility if she gets upset :S
LOL!!! I have my lawyer standing by.
Sounds like a fable you might tell your kids to teach them a lesson! LOL
Haha, yeah, that was kind of the idea 🙂
Love this! It reminds me of Where the Wild Things Are.
Thanks so much. That’s a helluva comparison – but it was the sort of vibe I was going for so I’m glad it came through.
Wow! This is brilliant. It’d make a seriously good fairytale/children’s book. Sir, develop this further. It’s good.
Well thanks John – that’s really kind of you. I do really love this poem but wasn’t sure what sort of reception it would get. It’s beyond reassuring to hear such positive feedback.
And I love the idea of a children’s/illustrated book… I’ll have to get on to that.
Do. That’s not lip-service. It’s got the makings of a classic, and the undertow message (laziness) is thought-provoking. This is golden.
Thanks. And will do.
Has the feeling of a dark children’s tale. Great job.
Fantastic writing. Cheers!
Thanks a lot Jeremiah!
this is beautiful, orange!
Thanks very much! Glad you like it.
I do enjoy your poems so much. Good work!
Thanks Garrett… appreciate that.
Incredible. Great stuff! 🙂
Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it..
wow. a lovely and sad fable
Aw, thank you. I’ll accept a ‘wow’ anytime.
I like the imagery. Poor moon. Poor us!
Thanks Jessica. And yes, it’s a sad ending… I’m considering an alternative, more optimistic way to end it!
Sad is okay sometimes! More poignant that way.
That’s the apocalypse if I ever heard it. Nice way to portray the importance of responsibility, though I kind of agree with the sun. Speaking of which, my alarm clock has a date with one of my rear tires. Nicely done!
Ha. Thanks. And for the re-blog… much appreciated!
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Imagine if the Sun and the Moon shirked on their duties…
A good fable. I have a son who never gets up before midday and never goes to sleep before 3am. The sun is wasting its time shining for him in the morning.
Ha, what a waste of the sun’s efforts. Maybe if you removed his curtains? 😉
Said the sun.
All I can hear is your damned whining,”
LOL! Soooo many people I work with have this same attitude. Damn the sun! ;oP
I know, right? We moan when there’s no sun and then we moan when it comes out. Shut up your whinging, people!